Marketing speak
February 16th, 2009“Brevity”, said Polonius, “is the soul of wit”, and I fear this needs more emphasis in our schools, particularly amongst those destined, in later life, to compose marketing materials.
A screen in a hospital waiting room shows a succession of slides about the services on offer; one begins:
BreastHealth UK
The concept of BreastHealth UK is to help women organise and manage their breast health.
A certain superfluity, perchance?
Besides, it seems unlikely to me that any of the fairer sex start their Monday mornings thinking, “This week I intend to organise and manage my breast health”.
February 16th, 2009 at 12:50 pm
Here, here. In the Cambridge Computer Lab Ring we are currently doing the scoring for the annual Hall of Fame awards. This year we have introduced a score for clarity of language, ranging from 5 (unambiguous, concise, appropriate for its audience) to 0 (lengthy, meaningless drivel).